Overall this paper was very well written. I really liked how it was structured out with each topic being its own paragraph. However, I found that it lacked many connection to the theme of the class or technology in general. Continue reading →

I read Sprosty’s essay, and the quality of it was overall good with only a few mistakes. He clearly stated his stance on the topic within the first paragraph. He had chosen that Frankenstein’s gravest mistake was abandoning the creature and Continue reading →

After reading this essay, there are many positive aspects that can be identified. She starts off with a strong introduction where she clearly states what she will be arguing throughout her writing. She believes that Victor’s major mistake in the Continue reading →

After reading this essay, I found that the argument is well stated. From the different essays I have already read in my small group, you had a different introduction that I really enjoyed. It was more interesting to see you Continue reading →

All of my comments on your google document are going to be pretty much the same as here. Instead of saying “I believe” or “think”, you should be more assertive with your claim to make your argument seem more confident. Continue reading →

Her essay was well thought out and supported her claim that Victor’s ultimate mistake was leaving the monster. I feel that throughout the essay, however, there was a lack of transition sentences. The lack of transition sentences makes the essay Continue reading →

The essay Ryan A. wrote was overall pretty good. The intro is generally pretty solid, with a few word choice problems and small fixes to make, with a good thesis. The first body paragraph I thought had way too much Continue reading →

The big idea of the essay is that the monster could have been saved from his actions if Victor had nurtured him instead of abandoning him. The arguments towards this main idea are all strong and well thought out. However, Continue reading →

Response to Derin’s Essay In response to your essay, Derin, I thought that your argument was clear and a very good idea to base the paper on, possibly because I chose to write on the same topic. You do take Continue reading →

The overall essay argues a very well thought out position on Frankenstein’s mistake and the quotes used are well incorporated to back up the argument. The points mention in the thesis are relevant and have good support from the novel Continue reading →