The best part about this paper was the clear thesis and strong stance on the topic. They also did a good job with acknowledging the counterargument and giving evidence on their argument. The big idea of this paper was that it was Victor’s fault for abandoning the monster and not him creating the monster. There was solid evidence to explain this idea. This person also did a good job integrating the Billy Joy article within the essay to further develop the main ideas. There were few minor errors in sentence structure, but overall the message was clearly stated. The only critical thing I could say is that the introduction paragraph is quite long and could be broken up into two separate paragraphs. This person wrote a strong conclusion paragraph which tied together all of the ideas from Frankenstein and Bill Joy’s article.